Guy T. Koepp Posted April 21, 2006 Posted April 21, 2006 In the ancient tradition of Japaneese Haiku. I have been inspired by Tatsu. Sun sets Dragon wakes, flying looping twisting beast, can not wait to ride. Lets see what you got people! Guy "Ginormous Poetloriat!" Koepp
arrowfanman Posted April 21, 2006 Posted April 21, 2006 ^ I love it! Now our dragon lives, Water-dummies urinate, And I sit and wait.
pete4winds Posted April 21, 2006 Posted April 21, 2006 I'll throw my $.02 in!!! Darkened dragon’s cave On a magic mountain top Tatsu breathing fire
arrowfanman Posted April 21, 2006 Posted April 21, 2006 ^ Nice...keep 'em coming! Here, I made another... Tatsu is damn sweet... Still not as cool as Riddler, But then, nothing is. Lol...just representin' yo. -Jahan
pete4winds Posted April 21, 2006 Posted April 21, 2006 ^Good one...nice change in the last line Monster called Tatsu Flying swiftly through the air Strafing the treetops
Guy T. Koepp Posted April 21, 2006 Author Posted April 21, 2006 ^^Jahan, I think your second stance is more like 7.5 syllables. Just say Riddler. With the 's it adds another half beat. Nice work though. Here's another. April rains bring mudd, saddened enthusiast cries May comes Dragon soars. Yeah Baby!
pete4winds Posted April 21, 2006 Posted April 21, 2006 ^oops only six syllables in second stanza. Maybe "saddened enthusiast cries"...?
Louise Posted April 21, 2006 Posted April 21, 2006 ^^Jahan, I think your second stance is more like 7.5 syllables. Says the guy whose second line only has 6 syllables ^^ ... EDIT: Damn it, beaten! ^
Guy T. Koepp Posted April 21, 2006 Author Posted April 21, 2006 Sad den ed En thu sia st I beg to differ!
pete4winds Posted April 21, 2006 Posted April 21, 2006 you're putting emPHEEsis on an extra sylLAHble??
SharkTums Posted April 21, 2006 Posted April 21, 2006 Tatsu Peed On Me It Was A True Exclusive Now I Feel Dirty
Guy T. Koepp Posted April 21, 2006 Author Posted April 21, 2006 Sadden is two syllables. When you add the ed, it adds a third. If you even say it fast it breaks down into 2.5. I was rounding up.
pete4winds Posted April 21, 2006 Posted April 21, 2006 Sadden is two syllables. When you add the ed, it adds a third. If you even say it fast it breaks down into 2.5. I was rounding up. You're reachin', but I'll concede (it's your thread, after all )
Guy T. Koepp Posted April 21, 2006 Author Posted April 21, 2006 Thanks dude! I realy like the phrase: Saddened Enthusiast cries It has more emotion. Gutwrenching actually. Besides, it fully extends my 6.5 to a full 7. Thanks.
pete4winds Posted April 21, 2006 Posted April 21, 2006 English teacher says Saddened is two syllables Tatsu haiku thread Nah, kidding!!!
Jeezus Juice Posted April 21, 2006 Posted April 21, 2006 High Flying Taco Sour cream will be the way Supersize this please...
Guy T. Koepp Posted April 21, 2006 Author Posted April 21, 2006 Nice! Mabey we can have EBL check in on this thred to make sure all Haiku is structured properly. I believe he is a literary major or spelling bee champ or something like that.
pete4winds Posted April 21, 2006 Posted April 21, 2006 Go get EBL Tatsu haiku inspector Are we all correct?
Guy T. Koepp Posted April 21, 2006 Author Posted April 21, 2006 I will PM him, he is a very busy man though, I'll bet he can help
pete4winds Posted April 21, 2006 Posted April 21, 2006 ^ 9 syllables in stanza 2? The haiku inspector will be even busier in here
Wes Posted April 21, 2006 Posted April 21, 2006 What the hell is this? Are you smoking crack or what? Seriously, why?
Guy T. Koepp Posted April 21, 2006 Author Posted April 21, 2006 ^ 9 syllables in stanza 2? The haiku inspector will be even busier in here 9? I must go to bed, wings of dragons in my mind sleep is not a chore
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